103
Are poems allowed?
(lemmy.ca)
you are viewing a single comment's thread
view the rest of the comments
view the rest of the comments
this post was submitted on 22 Apr 2026
103 points (100.0% liked)
Art Share🎨
7621 readers
201 users here now
This is a friendly community for everyone who wants to share their art with the world! Everyone is welcomed 🎨
Please visit https://lemmy.world/c/artmarket as well! This is a community for artists to post their portfolios and announce availability to take commissions, as well as get visibility for Ko-fi, Patreon, and other funding for art activities.
Rules
AI Art: While we appreciate AI generated art, there are more appropriate communities to post that type of art to. Please keep posts to non-AI generated art only. This rule includes AI art that was then manually manipulated (e.g. drawing on top of something generated by AI).
NSFW Policy: Nudity and suggestive content has always been a part of art, but it may be something that some users don't wish to see or cannot view in certain circumstances (e.g. at work). If your work contains nudity or suggestive content, please mark it as NSFW. Work that contains nudity or suggestive content that is not marked as NSFW will be taken down. As long as the NSFW tag is used, we welcome nude or suggestive subject matter. If you aren't sure if your work is NSFW or not, just ask yourself, "Could I look at this at a typical office job and not get into trouble?" If you're still not sure after that, you should probably mark it as NSFW just to be on the safe side.
Spam: Please do not spam this community. Self promotion is fine if you just want people to be aware of your work, but blatant attempts at spam will result in the past being removed and possibly a ban. If you aren't sure if what you are posting is spam, please contact the moderator first.
Conduct: Be nice, and don't be a jerk. Constructive criticism is OK, but don't be mean. Encouragement is always welcomed.
founded 2 years ago
MODERATORS
Rhyming is only part of equation
Timing b another part o creation
Meter may make many miracles
Everrybudy clik on tha spectacal
Limitation be really creative tool
Invitation to others that are cool
Truth tho: you are what you sow
So plant seeds to grow ur show!
I'll be honest I have a really hard time getting a handle on meter :_(
I recommend listening to a song with a solid, steady beat on repeat and writing in rhythm to it. Your brain will naturally conform words to fit that beat. Also, reading poetry can give insights to what is possible. I recommend William Blake as that was who got me to start trying emulate him
Tiger Tiger burning bright
In the forests of the night
My worst habit is creating a lot more than I read. I'm pretty ignorant to poetry as a topic although I've been at it on and off for a couple years now and its about time I sat down and did some studying.
I usually focus on long strings of rhymes, alliteration and repeating vowel and consonant sounds. When it comes to meter I'm practically deaf to it so far but I've pulled it off in a few rhymes. Didnt worry so much about it for this one.
All in all I have fun doing this whether or not its necessarily a correct way to do poems
Do what comes natural to you and you enjoy doing tf outta and do it all the time. People don't understand this mastery ish is logarithmic; I have gone through several escarpments in capability over the twelve years I've done this near-daily, and I jist gained the ability to guarantee that I can hit near perfect line length the way I do just prior to last year. And it's still going up!
Eventually I'd like to be able to write meter off the top of my head without thinking about it too much. In the meantime, if I spend a good chunk of time agonizing over a line I can put it into meter. (I think)
"Come all beasts from west and east let's have a feast of bacon grease"
:)
Eventually I'd like to write more to songs and play and compose my own melodies.
At the moment I'm a broke joke of a star who can't afford their landlord, let alone a guitar
:(
I'm in a similar boat; difficult circumstances with my life partner. I once thought I would pop into fame being a juggler and have a job being a cop, which is the magick God used on me to get me to do my spiritual work and heal. Now I'm a juggler, educator, and a skilled righter and I know I am where I need to be for the biggest picture across eternity; which is on a trajectory with a steep positive slope.
The Buddha said enlightenment is its own reward. You don't transcend physicality for the iddhi (magick), you do it because it is what you're most meant to do, to live your ideal life and be happy making others happy. Only you know what that is, so figure out an azimuth between where you are and where you are going and how fast you can travel, keeping in mind consistency is more important than moments of spontaneous word conjuring, though the most creative things we create do just fall out of our heads at times, which happens at a greater frequency the more you practice.
The best way to integrate the habit of casual free-form anything is to tie it with something you already do. I used to run track and cross-country, and when I was playing something like Paper Mario that had a "Pit of 100 Challenges" type dungeon, I would do a set of push-ups, or sit-ups, squats - just one "rep" per floor, whatever that is - and then do a big "set" at the treasure chest floors, which I would run around the block. I did this with juggling and writing, too, which directly benefited one another, being complements of creative activity.
It won't take too long before you will see something else you can do with what you're doing, and then you will merge those together, and doors start opening up. Share your art, and market it keeping in mind how attention works (a strategic typo alone can net thousands of views), and you will manifest something for yourself, which only you can determine.
Its funny you bring up video game mechanics as a thought device for real life. When I think of a longterm challenge I can slowly chip away at, like a savings or payment plan, building skills and experience, or even a long walk, I think about all those times I pulled off a long grind in Runescape haha.
Paper Mario was one of my favorite games as a kid haha. My life transformed for a while but I always held on to the nerd memories. I imagined like I was living in Fallout a lot of the time.
Last year during a zero dollar period I wrote this cardboard sign "Rhymes for Dimes". It worked and I had to write a lot of these to back up the performance.
I was out of a house about 3 years and was evolving upon an old pan handling habit (and strangely knowledge from my former marketing major) after I was housed and couldn't make ends meet on part time. I felt like I had to give a little something back so I did the rhyme thing, got a lot of positive feedback for it and kept doing it the whole spring summer and fall. I usually go for long rhyme chains with some sort of message behind them which vents about my situation in a humorous way in exchange for, well basically anything, even if its just a smile or a crooked look.
This year I'm trying to be more money smart and keep the performance to the local coffee shops poetry slam and open mic. I have small entrepreneurial goals and will relegate the paid performance to a suggestion on the tip jar for a while. The going business plan is street and fresh market pretzels :)
Alternitavely my life goes to the shitter again and I have something to lean on thats slightly less soul killing than the depressed approach to panhandling.
Anyways I trailed off there but my point was that its fascinating how different skills can develop together in weird ways.
One thing I learned is that it only starts to really work when you stop caring about the money outright. I remember one of the first times I went out juggling to busk, where I made like $5-6, while waiting for the bus back, a young woman came up to me and asked for two dollars to see her mom in the hospital. Well, I looked up and over, and the hospital she said was right there, two blocks away, so I tried to help her by telling her how to get there, then offered to carry her even, but she kept wiggling out of it and saying she needed to catch the bus there. Well, I thought I was being scammed, so I huffed off, to see a man around the corner look disappointed at me while putting a large bill away.
Karma is real, both artificial and divine. The world and linear causation are illusions, where consciousness is the base substance of reality, but not like pansychism that says rocks n trees are conscious, but rather we are pockets of consciousness called monads that get woven between parallel universes to facilitate our Karma. I can explain the mechanisms behind this to some detail, but the thing I'm saying is, what you put out determines what comes back to you. Your intention is the only thing you have direct control over, and you entangle yourself in every moment because of it.
Karmic entanglement = quantum entanglement.
I feel a big karmic debt for all of it and always pay forward when I get an opportunity but it would take years at this point.
Back to the topic of meter, how's this attempt?
You might have seen a sign of mine
It says this line, its "Rhymes for Dimes"
Was Written fast with ill design
So hastily with little time.
And made with cardboard slicked with grime
I call at strangers with a mime
Then I am paid a Single dime
and I climb up from my long sit
Get up to play the silly bit
Put out the cigarette I had lit
Then chime a prime brief rhyme sublime
And what had I received for this crime?
mountains of lime coloured slime covered dimes from my fountain of rhymes!
You might have seen a sign of mine
Says this line - “Rhymes for Dimes”
Was Written fast w/ divine design
So hastily and with little bit of time
Made w cardboard slicked w grime
Call @ strangers by means o mime
Then, I be paid w/ a Singlular dime
And I climb up from my longest sit
Getting up to thus play the silly bit
Putting out the cigarette I'd just lit
Chime brief prime rhyme sublime
& wat did I receive for this crime?
Mountains of lime coloured slime covered dimes from my fountain of rhymes!
You can spruce it up even more, I just did it fast. You've got the spirit, and thst is the fuel that will carry you the distance.
I'm puzzled by a few of the edits where you substitute with using /w as well as and using &. Is it meant to emphasize the words are stressed differently?
Also divine seems like the wrong adjective. The description of the sign is supposed to give a vibe of self aware incompetence while divine seems boastful.
I'll take this one back to the workshop and tweak the meter. I thought I had it. Speaking of videogames, I found a fun trick that kind of works for me; I imagine the voice in Illidan in cutscene dialogues with the dramatic emphasis on stressed syllables. Its not perfect but it makes me giggle.
I really like the way you worded the mime part but I'll use something Ill write myself just so its more mine :)
It's to shorten length.
W/ is a common abbreviation for "with;" W/o is a common one for "without." & is the ampersand and means "and."
The divine has no problem being the fool. Someone wise once asked if God can microwave a burrito so hot even He can't eat it. In that same light, I once seen John Cena lose to a little girl in arm wrestling. "Divine" is not "anti-slime," but rather "slime" is half of divine.
Also, my original poem was meant to show alternative forms of limitations you could use to evoke creativity, to include consonance/alliteration. I really stand by the notion that a strategic typo does something wonky with human psychology; comparing two equivalent level of skill jokes, with one being a double-meaning typo, that is the one that will have a full order of magnitude more views, for whatever sociological reason.
And you are going to be photographed/filmed, have no doubt.
I don't know what Illidan is, but I liked games when I was younger (a cult reprogrammed my dopamine through oil changes n cheese cloths; operant and classical conditioning), and if you want me to understand, send a clip of what you mean.